Talk:Chapter 2/@comment-8430363-20140806210205

Loved the chapter, except for one little thing that I can't get over... :P

It's this line:

''"It was a beautiful view; the sky above and city below. But he had more important concerns at the moment. Or, to be exact, one more important concern.

"Annie Leonhardt." '' Now, I'm gonna be giving you a little constructive criticism here. Honestly, what it sounded like to me was:

''"It was a beautiful view; the sky above and city below. SUDDENLY: ANNIE LEONHARDT! :O <3 <3 <3"

''Anyway, just saying that it felt a little too rushed. But besides that, I enjoyed your chapter. ;D